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featherwizard) wrote2007-02-12 01:24 pm
featherwizard) wrote2007-02-12 01:24 pm
My Eyes! They Burn!
New entry for GAFF worthiness:
This review was written in response to Death of A Soul by roedhunt, and starts off responding to the author's comment that:
"Oh good! That's what I wanted actually. It showed (I hoped) that even beyond his obsessions and greed, he was still a man who is human. He's not evil, but has done what many would consider to be evil. In his own mind he felt he did nothing wrong - so does that make him wrong just because everyone else thinks it is?
But thats the way I look at it. *g* Thank you for reading and reviewing! It makes my day! *hugs*"
I just had to respond. So I did:
"Actually, forcing someone into marriage and raping them IS evil, not just something that "can be considered" evil. If Snape was actually not-evil and/or actually had the motive of protecting Harry (as opposed to the motive of having sex with him), Snape would not have demanded a marriage; at the very least, there would be no clauses about having sex.
The fact that Snape does not recognize the evil that he has done means that he has no conscience (also called being a sociopath). Last I looked, sociopaths were considered evil for precisely this reason; they did not recognize the tremendous harm they were doing to other people.
I feel sorry for Snape too; the man's a sociopathic lunatic, and will probably never be able to fit into normal society. He's doomed to a lonely and condemnation-filled life.
But the fact that he is going to be lonely and hated does not excuse his actions or mean that he and what he did is not evil. And being evil does not mean that someone is not human. Your logic is really, really out of whack here. You're setting things up as mutually exclusionary that really aren't; being evil and being human are almost defined as being co-existing conditions (until you get into supernatural demonic manifestations and things like that).
The writing for this fic is ok but the plot is standard and not pulled off well. You've created a perfect non-con setup, but then back out of it by pulling sympathy for Snape, who deserves sympathy only in the way Voldemort deserves sympathy for being so obviously off his rocker. The fic isn't coherent. Also, the description of why people turned against Harry and the whole reasoning behind the marriage isn't very original or well-thought out.
If you went with the concept all the way, I think that would create a stronger fic. Trying to see things from different points of view requires that a different point of view have another take on the situation; unfortunately, that's not the case here. All sides of the story seem to point out that Snape is irrational and inhumane, Harry is tortured and no one seems to really care."
*shudder* *shudder* *shudders harder* I've read good non-con, and I've read good non-con that turns into con. But this is fic just can't make up its mind, and the twists and turns leave readers thinking they're on a roller-coaster that keeps changing tracks.
And before you ask, I did sign my name. If I'm going to lambast someone's work, I'm certainly not going to be cowardly enough to do it anonymously. Also, I'm talking about the Snape in the fic only here.
This review was written in response to Death of A Soul by roedhunt, and starts off responding to the author's comment that:
"Oh good! That's what I wanted actually. It showed (I hoped) that even beyond his obsessions and greed, he was still a man who is human. He's not evil, but has done what many would consider to be evil. In his own mind he felt he did nothing wrong - so does that make him wrong just because everyone else thinks it is?
But thats the way I look at it. *g* Thank you for reading and reviewing! It makes my day! *hugs*"
I just had to respond. So I did:
"Actually, forcing someone into marriage and raping them IS evil, not just something that "can be considered" evil. If Snape was actually not-evil and/or actually had the motive of protecting Harry (as opposed to the motive of having sex with him), Snape would not have demanded a marriage; at the very least, there would be no clauses about having sex.
The fact that Snape does not recognize the evil that he has done means that he has no conscience (also called being a sociopath). Last I looked, sociopaths were considered evil for precisely this reason; they did not recognize the tremendous harm they were doing to other people.
I feel sorry for Snape too; the man's a sociopathic lunatic, and will probably never be able to fit into normal society. He's doomed to a lonely and condemnation-filled life.
But the fact that he is going to be lonely and hated does not excuse his actions or mean that he and what he did is not evil. And being evil does not mean that someone is not human. Your logic is really, really out of whack here. You're setting things up as mutually exclusionary that really aren't; being evil and being human are almost defined as being co-existing conditions (until you get into supernatural demonic manifestations and things like that).
The writing for this fic is ok but the plot is standard and not pulled off well. You've created a perfect non-con setup, but then back out of it by pulling sympathy for Snape, who deserves sympathy only in the way Voldemort deserves sympathy for being so obviously off his rocker. The fic isn't coherent. Also, the description of why people turned against Harry and the whole reasoning behind the marriage isn't very original or well-thought out.
If you went with the concept all the way, I think that would create a stronger fic. Trying to see things from different points of view requires that a different point of view have another take on the situation; unfortunately, that's not the case here. All sides of the story seem to point out that Snape is irrational and inhumane, Harry is tortured and no one seems to really care."
*shudder* *shudder* *shudders harder* I've read good non-con, and I've read good non-con that turns into con. But this is fic just can't make up its mind, and the twists and turns leave readers thinking they're on a roller-coaster that keeps changing tracks.
And before you ask, I did sign my name. If I'm going to lambast someone's work, I'm certainly not going to be cowardly enough to do it anonymously. Also, I'm talking about the Snape in the fic only here.